Re: FN-FORUM: ull love this..........

date posted 12th January 2003 18:23

Home page

:- isn't considered correct. : if you must, but it looks more like a
heading, so I think no punctuation would look better

Slow version

First page
Inconsistent use of capitals in menu

"has been providing print and web related services since 1998, delivering
clients with working solutions to their design and marketing needs, while
not rocking their accountants desk" doesn't make sense. You could end the
first sentence after 1998 and use "without" instead of "while not". That'd
help. Deliver is a transitive verb, so "delivering clients" means packing
them into a box and getting them to a destination - you mean "delivering
working solutions TO clients" or "providing clients with working solutions".

Actually, none of it really makes sense. I'm assuming that a .de domain
means that English is not your first language. If proper English matters on
the site, I suggest that you get a English copywriter to rewrite the text.

Typo: loosing should be losing. (On the other hand, I don't think a
non-English speaker would confuse lose and loose - so now I'm confused).

Service page

Odd use of capitals and ampersands

Typos: regcognizable should be recognizable, Adhering to your companies
should be Adhering to your company's

Download
Your disclaimer doesn't make sense and probably contradicts itself. To waver
is to flicker or to begin to weaken. To waive is refrain from insisting on
something.

Portfolio

Noteworthy is one word

HTH

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Kathy
http://www.vendetta.co.uk
DNRC Minister for Useful but Irritating Information and Trivia
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